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Monday, June 26, 2017

My writing

This is a piece of writing I have been working on in writing time for show not tell

 My lion adventure
I had to leave the building so suddenly that I only had time to grab my book. Then I sprinted out of the building. The reason I had to get out so fast was because there were ferocious lions chasing me. I stopped to rest because I had bean running for days. So I was exhausted and I needed food and water. I guzzled  down a bottle of water as first as the lions chased me. Then I sprinted on and just then I turned around a corner and there was a meadow where no lions could go


I hope you enjoyed  my writing and comment if you enjoyed it

4 comments:

  1. Your writing was very well done, I look forward to read more of your blogs.

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  2. I love this because i like lions too.
    Did you know lions eat once a week.
    Next time you could make it longer.
    Why did you do write about lion?

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  3. I love this because lions are my favorite beast.
    Did you know lioness do all the work.
    Next time you could write a little bit more.
    Why did you post this on your blog ?

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